Rewrite?

I began a 3rd person omnipotent story about a year ago. I’ve improved since then and have done some experimentation with 1st person limited perspective. Today, I rewrote that chapter in 1st person. But, before I commit to rewriting about 10k words, I wanted input from the cloud. Which version do you like better? Tips? Secrets? Keep in mind I haven’t edited the 3rd person perspective since a year ago.
Here are the versions:
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About Mark Gardner

Mark Gardner lives in northern Arizona with his wife, three children and a pair of spoiled dogs. Mark holds a degrees in Computer Systems and Applications and Applied Human Behavior. View all posts by Mark Gardner

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